L.I. We are learning make content relevant and add weight to argument by having an effective position statement, main points, evidence and restatement. Contain elaboration of main points.Effective position statement:S.C. we can
make our position and purpose clear
use a rhetorical question
include a list of fact/evidence that will be discussed in writing
Restatement, elaboration of main points:
S.C. We Can
restate my position throughout my writing
make a main point and back it up with evidence or statistics
Monday 14th March 2011
Extended Morning Tea.
Tauranga Intermediate 30 18Th Avenue Tauranga Dear Mr Diver I know that having another extended morning tea is a good way to encourage kids to be good and try hard, and also get in more sports during morning tea. If you were a kid wouldn’t you want an extended morning tea? It will create a great step for Tauranga Intermediate to start giving out this privilege for being good and being back to class quick, we will probably turn out to be the fittest school in NZ. I also think it will be good for the teachers because they will be able mark work and get up to date in the work they need us to do. I think that we have all been good so I think we should Be allowed another extended morning tea for being so good in class and at lunch time. I believe that this is a great step for Tauranga Intermediate School. Let’s continue giving kids privileges for being good and working hard.I know that if you keep giving Tauranga Intermediate School will get fitter with more running around at play and lunch time. I reckon people will use this time to go in the gym and do weights and exercise stuff.I also think that we could extra sport and exercise in so we will be the fittest school in New Zealand. The teachers will like it to because they could lie on the couch eating, drinking and talking. I think that the kids can have more lunch and go get water and stuff from the canteen. I also think it will be good for the teachers because they will be able mark work and get up to date in the work they need us to do. I think that we should have another extended morning tea because I am sure that every one has been good and been doing all of their work and they deserve a rewards. I reckon that every time we should get an extended morning tea every day. I think we should have an extended morning tea. and I’m sure that all the teachers would want one to. so can we have an extended morning tea? thank you.
Yours sincerely Joe Fitzpatrick Thursday 31 March 2011
I think that nuclear power is such a bad idea. Have you seen what happens when they have a nuclear meltdown? I don’t think you would like to experience it. so that’s why we should use wind, water and solar because as you know they are so much better than nuclear power. Nuclear power may be cheap and affordable but have you thought about the waste and fumes that are being let into the world by using nuclear power? Places around the world have experienced these bad disasters as you may call it. Think about what nuclear power does to the environment and to us.
Have you thought about what is so bad about nuclear power plants. 1. You could get blown up if you were to close to a meltdown. 2. You could get cancer from a meltdown if you were 1000 metres in all directions from the plant and then eventually die during the 1-2 years following. 3. You could exidently drink or eat a bit of the nuclear waste that people buried in the ground by your water or peoples crops and get really sick, get cancer or even DIE.
Wind, water and solar are so much better than nuclear power because one they can’t have nuclear meltdowns. Two if you use solar you use the sun and don’t get nuclear waste after using it unlike nuclear power plants. Three water is a free way to get power all you do is put a wind mill like thing in the fast flowing water you could get heaps of free power. Four Wind mills are better than nuclear because it just relies on the wind and not on power and it doesn’t have nuclear waste left over, It also doesn’t rely on power to keep the rods cold and if you don’t it will cause a nuclear meltdown.
Nuclear power may be cheap and affordable but have you thought about the waste and fumes that you are letting out into the environment. I hate it how people can get sick by eating or drinking the waste that had got buried and had sunken down into the bores in the ground. It so bad how people can just pollute the environment by letting all those fumes out of those power plants and not get in trouble or anything.
I really think it will be best for everyone if just got rid of all the nuclear power plants and DID NOT GET ANY MORE. Do you think that it would be good if more people died because of these things. Please just get rid of them.
Restatement, elaboration of main points:
S.C. We Can
Monday 14th March 2011
Extended Morning Tea.Tauranga Intermediate 30 18Th Avenue Tauranga
Dear Mr Diver
I know that having another extended morning tea is a good way to encourage kids to be good and try hard, and also get in more sports during morning tea. If you were a kid wouldn’t you want an extended morning tea? It will create a great step for Tauranga Intermediate to start giving out this privilege for being good and being back to class quick, we will probably turn out to be the fittest school in NZ. I also think it will be good for the teachers because they will be able mark work and get up to date in the work they need us to do. I think that we have all been good so I think we should Be allowed another extended morning tea for being so good in class and at lunch time.
I believe that this is a great step for Tauranga Intermediate School. Let’s continue giving kids privileges for being good and working hard.I know that if you keep giving Tauranga Intermediate School will get fitter with more running around at play and lunch time. I reckon people will use this time to go in the gym and do weights and exercise stuff.I also think that we could extra sport and exercise in so we will be the fittest school in New Zealand.
The teachers will like it to because they could lie on the couch eating, drinking and talking. I think that the kids can have more lunch and go get water and stuff from the canteen. I also think it will be good for the teachers because they will be able mark work and get up to date in the work they need us to do.
I think that we should have another extended morning tea because I am sure that every one has been good and been doing all of their work and they deserve a rewards. I reckon that every time we should get an extended morning tea every day.
I think we should have an extended morning tea. and I’m sure that all the teachers would want one to. so can we have an extended morning tea? thank you.
Yours sincerely Joe Fitzpatrick
Thursday 31 March 2011
I think that nuclear power is such a bad idea. Have you seen what happens when they have a nuclear meltdown? I don’t think you would like to experience it. so that’s why we should use wind, water and solar because as you know they are so much better than nuclear power. Nuclear power may be cheap and affordable but have you thought about the waste and fumes that are being let into the world by using nuclear power? Places around the world have experienced these bad disasters as you may call it. Think about what nuclear power does to the environment and to us.
Have you thought about what is so bad about nuclear power plants. 1. You could get blown up if you were to close to a meltdown. 2. You could get cancer from a meltdown if you were 1000 metres in all directions from the plant and then eventually die during the 1-2 years following. 3. You could exidently drink or eat a bit of the nuclear waste that people buried in the ground by your water or peoples crops and get really sick, get cancer or even DIE.
Wind, water and solar are so much better than nuclear power because one they can’t have nuclear meltdowns. Two if you use solar you use the sun and don’t get nuclear waste after using it unlike nuclear power plants. Three water is a free way to get power all you do is put a wind mill like thing in the fast flowing water you could get heaps of free power. Four Wind mills are better than nuclear because it just relies on the wind and not on power and it doesn’t have nuclear waste left over, It also doesn’t rely on power to keep the rods cold and if you don’t it will cause a nuclear meltdown.
Nuclear power may be cheap and affordable but have you thought about the waste and fumes that you are letting out into the environment. I hate it how people can get sick by eating or drinking the waste that had got buried and had sunken down into the bores in the ground. It so bad how people can just pollute the environment by letting all those fumes out of those power plants and not get in trouble or anything.
I really think it will be best for everyone if just got rid of all the nuclear power plants and DID NOT GET ANY MORE. Do you think that it would be good if more people died because of these things. Please just get rid of them.